The Official Writing Challenge
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I used to lead whale watching trips, so I get the analogy & I like it.
08/23/07
With a bit of tweaking, this would make a sweet children's book.

A few bumps in meter, and a few forced rhymes, but easy to fix.

I was so relieved when Delta and Dawn made it to the ocean!
Good advice.
08/24/07
Delightful, I think someone else said, with a bit of tweeking this will work well in a childrens story book. Keep writing.