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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Sad (07/26/07)
Ka-chunk, the door closed with the finality of a gavel. "Well, that's it." Grace thought to herself. "Just you and me kid." She sighed and looked around. The house stared back. A faint buzzing drifted from the master bathroom. "I'll have to change that bulb." Grace said, "I suppose it's my job now. I wonder where he kept the spares?"

She wandered through the living room, feeling the absence of the family and friends that packed the void not three weeks earlier. They arrived with smiles and hugs and good memories.

Grace entered the kitchen and busied herself cleaning up the breakfast remains. She chuckled as she remembered her friend Ruth dancing while scrambling eggs. "She should call when she gets to Melbourne." Grace muttered to herself. When everyone else left to reenter life, Ruth stayed, filling the days with small talk and cleaning.

Now, everything was quiet. Grace sat at the kitchen table and folded her gnarled, but neatly manicured fingers. After fifty-seven years, she was alone. "How will I fill my days?" she wondered. Rented movies and tables-for-one loomed ahead of her.

The chime of the clock told her it was ten. Habit reached for her bible. She looked at the cover. "I know that he is with You," Grace prayed, "But it is so empty here." She opened to her spot and read through the blur, finding "I will never leave you, nor forsake you." Slowly, she smiled. "Maybe not so empty." she thought and continued reading.
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Jan Ackerson
08/02/07
Oh, I feel Grace's loneliness! There's nothing emptier than an empty nest. Thanks for the reminder of Who is with us.
Willa Maye
08/02/07
My goodness! You expressed a lot through use of a small amount of words. Indeed, when the burial has taken place, and the repass is finished, the walls really do appear to close in on you when "everyone leaves to reenter life" but only if the person is looking through natural eyes.... Thank you for expressing this sense of void without ever mentioning the word "Sad."
Catrina Bradley
08/04/07
Wow, what are you doing in beginners?? So much detail and feeling packed into so few words. Every word seems perfectly chosen. This article should do very well.
Brenda Buikema
08/06/07
How sad. Well written and I could feel the feelings.
Marilyn Schnepp 
08/08/07
This proves that it doesn't take a long epistle to say what needs to be said. Brilliant message in a few brief sentences...and tells it like it is. I liked this one...very well done.