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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Sad (07/26/07)

TITLE: Barney, Hug
By Debbie Thorkildsen
08/01/07


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BARNEY, HUG


We took our two-year-old daughter to see a live Barney show this summer. She loves watching Barney videos at home and often cries when the videos end. When we heard that Barney was coming to an amusement park nearby, we just knew we had to take her.

Tianna’s eyes grew big when she heard the opening music and Barney was introduced. I heard her quick intake of breath and knew she was awestruck when he walked out on stage.

She clapped and danced along with the different songs until Barney's most popular song began. When the first notes for this final song reached her ears, Tianna burst into tears as she realized the show was over. After he sang the line, “with a great big hug and a kiss from me to you…” Tianna threw her arms up, reaching for a hug from the big purple dinosaur.

Before taking Tianna to the show, we thought she might be scared of Barney because he is a lot bigger in person than he seems to be on the television screen in our living room. She wasn’t afraid of him at all.

Since the shows were at an amusement park, the shows were really short, only fifteen minutes each. They had three shows though, so we took her to all three. It was the same show each time. It was just like watching a Barney video over and over.

At each show, she burst into tears at the same point - when Barney started singing “I love you, you love me…” She only cried for a couple of minutes after the first show. For about ten minutes after the second show, she had tears streaming down her face as she cried “Barney, hug.” After the third show, when Barney went around slapping hands with all the little children in the front row, I held her up when he came near and yelled “Barney, we need a hug.” Tianna had her arms stretched out towards him as far as she could reach. She was saying, “Barney, hug.” She just really wanted to hug that big guy. I don’t think Barney heard either of us, because she was the last child in the front row and he just touched her hands and walked off the stage. Tianna was really upset. I could hardly bare to see her looking so sad. She had the tears going again.

We quickly found a distraction in some other dressed up characters - a bear and a beaver. She gave each of them a big hug and then found her smile again.


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Jan Ackerson 08/02/07
Poor little thing!

Consider ending with Barney walking off the stage, perhaps with Tianna's tears...resist the temptation to end happily, when the real poignance is with the toddler's tears.

I felt as if I could see each moment with you...well-written.
Catrina Bradley 08/03/07
Good story-telling - very natural. It sounded like you were just telling the story. The build-up and the climax really grabbed me, but the ending seemed too ... easy, I guess. Overall, a nice job - I enjoyed!
Brenda Welc08/06/07
Boy do we know the love for Barney, so much so my second child knows nothing of the purple creature. Nicely written, very emotional.