The Official Writing Challenge
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Poor little thing!

Consider ending with Barney walking off the stage, perhaps with Tianna's tears...resist the temptation to end happily, when the real poignance is with the toddler's tears.

I felt as if I could see each moment with you...well-written.
Good story-telling - very natural. It sounded like you were just telling the story. The build-up and the climax really grabbed me, but the ending seemed too ... easy, I guess. Overall, a nice job - I enjoyed!
Boy do we know the love for Barney, so much so my second child knows nothing of the purple creature. Nicely written, very emotional.