The Official Writing Challenge
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08/02/07
"My heart has walked this terrain before..." Nice metaphor.

I liked this--consider tightening it up a bit and adding some more specifics of your time together with your friend, to help your readers to better understand your sadness.

Tender writing with a lovely ending.
08/06/07
Great rhythm to your story. Well done.
"...I had let my friend get under my skin and into my heart." I liked this part as it implied the depth of the friendship.