The Official Writing Challenge
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08/02/07
Very moving poem!

PM me if you'd like a few suggestions for improving the meter of this piece, which shows great promise.

Love the last stanza in particular.
Your feelings are felt by the reader. Although the reason for them is not clearly expressed, the answer is relevant for many situations.
I am looking forward to future poems as your writing skills develop.
As is the case for all writers, rewrite and rewrite. Keep on striving- I believe you have much to share. As my friend reminds me, "Persevere, my Sister."
08/03/07
Oh dear--I got your PM and was about to respond when I inadvertently deleted it. Please contact me again?
08/06/07
Alot said in a few words. Well done.