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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Sad (07/26/07)

TITLE: Goodbye, Dad
By Regina Rudzik
07/29/07


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His eyes...cloudy, gray... gazed through mine
as though taking in someone or something just over my shoulder
I willed him to speak a word...any word
To connect with him once more before his journey began

My eyes fastened upon his...
Yearning to see, to understand, to experience this with him.
I suppose I breathed
Yet focused solely on his halting breaths.

So close...my hands caressed the transparent skin
tenderly as if caressing an infant
and fully aware of his fragility
I leaned in closer still to catch any fleeting sound

“He’s here, Dad....Jesus is here”
The words of faith tumbled from my breaking heart
I longed to grasp his hand and walk with him
over the last few lengths separating him from his new home.

Don’t go.
Not yet.
I can’t lose you.
Breathe.....breathe...

Quiet reverberated throughout the room.
Stabbing sadness combined with infinite longing.
Oh, Daddy....
I love you...


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Anne Linington08/02/07
Excellent in every respect- well done and thanks for sharing.
Jan Ackerson 08/02/07
Beautiful and painful at once--thank you for baring your soul for us here.
Brenda Welc08/03/07
Tears are wellin' this was very well expressed. I could feel the wanting to not let go.
Angela M. Baker-Bridge08/04/07
Wow. My dad is terminally ill and we're scattered in four states across America and overseas. I each time I call we're so conscience it could be the last time.
Seema Bagai 08/05/07
Thank you for expressing your emotions in this poem. I could relate to it.
Catrina Bradley 08/07/07
Ok, you've made me tear up. Very powerful poetry.
Janice Fitzpatrick08/09/07
Oh how this bruoght the tears!My, do you wrap the feelings of sadness, longing, and fear of losing and letting go in one beautiful short piece. I love this. I can so relate to this as my mom and I had to say goodbye to my dad when he was on life support. Memories come flooding my mind and I am overwhelmed. I think this flipped a switch that I had chosen, out of pain, to not reach lately. This has inpsired me to write about my dad. Wow! Thx for this well written piece hon! God bless and keep up the writing.:0)