The Official Writing Challenge
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08/02/07
Well, there's not a writer on this site who can't relate to this!

Be careful of your verb tenses--you switched back and forth from present to past a few times.

I like the caring and supportive relationship between your two characters.
08/03/07
Well said! So sad is rejection, at least we know one place we will always be accepted!
08/04/07
Good message. You may want to consider additional spacing between the paragraphs for more clarity and punch. Keep writing and believing! Blessings... Angel