The Official Writing Challenge
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08/02/07
Well, there's not a writer on this site who can't relate to this!

Be careful of your verb tenses--you switched back and forth from present to past a few times.

I like the caring and supportive relationship between your two characters.
08/03/07
Well said! So sad is rejection, at least we know one place we will always be accepted!
Good message. You may want to consider additional spacing between the paragraphs for more clarity and punch. Keep writing and believing! Blessings... Angel