The Official Writing Challenge
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This was a great description of the kind of day that we all have now and then. I love the little girl's name, too!
I got a little lost at first reading this but it ended very well. I too liked the little girls name. Well written.
I have such a weakness for sweet little girls--this touched me.

Be careful to do all the piddly edits; there were a few errors in punctuation and sentence structure.

Lots of people have added a note of hope to their pieces this week--you took it one step further!

I really loved this peice. You conveyed that LISA was feeling sorry for herself and that the people around her seemed not even to notice she was in the same room with them. I've certainly felt like that on more than one occasion so I could realte to it very well. I also liked the way that you showed that no matter what happens there is always hope that things are going to change for the better. Wonderful job.
Very appropriate name for the little girl. It made the story both touching and symbolic. Nice job!