The Official Writing Challenge
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07/27/07
Good. Nice touch, but your POV's is a little jumpy. At first we don't know it is peter, though we do guess later and then you eventually add his name after all of this. Interesting.
07/29/07
You gave an intersting angle to this familiar story. I like the mood you created with the crowd and the dark atmosphere!
08/03/07
Congratulations, Richard. Your entry has placed 13th in Level 1. With so many entries in this level, you've really done well. The Lists for the Top 15 in each Level and the Top 40 overall is available in the Weekly Results and Highest Rankings forum of our Faithwriters Message Boards.