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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Embarrassed (07/19/07)

TITLE: The Tower
By Christopher Roe
07/23/07


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“…and now, I give you the newest addition to the Chicago Skyline, ‘The Ditka Tower.’”

The gathering of excited Chicagoans that had gathered to witness the grand opening clapped with great enthusiasm at these words. The mayor stepped forward, grabbed the giant pair of scissors, and cut the ribbon that extended over the doors. Once again, the crowd cheered loudly.

“At this time,” the mayor stated, “I would like to introduce you to the man who designed and built this tower.” Brian Anderson stepped forward and acknowledged the hundreds of people in front of him. He had never felt so happy in his life. He had graduated from college just 3 years ago, and this was his first major construction project. As the cheers and applause grew louder, his pride continued to swell. Nothing could ruin this day.

As he stood in front of the microphone, he opened his mouth to give thanks to those that supported him. At that moment, he heard a loud crack from behind him. Silence took over the crowd as they were amazed at the horrible sight that they were witnessing. The right side of the building began to sink into the ground. Birds scattered from the top of the building as people backed up, afraid that they might be caught in the building’s quick destruction. Structural beams were loudly snapping as the structure collapsed in front of their eyes. In three minutes, the tower had almost entirely disappeared into a pile of rubble.

With the building gone, people finally began talking again. It started as a whisper but quickly grew louder. Brian, wallowing in his shame, heard the derisive chants and stepped away from the podium. He turned to see the mayor quickly leaving the scene, but Brian knew that the mayor had nothing to do with this collapse. It was his fault; he was the architect, he was the project manager, and he was in charge of the construction. Somehow, he had made a mistake in the design, but he could not think of his error. The template he had used was the same as most of the towers in the area. The material was of the best quality. His workers were experienced and thorough.

People slowly left the area, disgusted with the ceremony and showing that disgust directly to Brian. As his embarrassment continued to seize his emotions, he finally thought of the answer he had thought of. Hurrying back to the trailer where he ran the construction project, he looked at the survey done of the land where the building had been erected. “That’s it,” he muttered to himself, “How could I have been so stupid. There was no way that building should have been built.” Knowing now that he would be hard pressed to find a job after this debacle, he slumped into a chair and began to cry. As his tears fell, they blurred the one word on his survey that mattered above all else: sand.

"But everyone who hears these words of mine and does not put them into practice is like a foolish man who built his house on sand." Matthew 7:26, NIV.


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Sara Harricharan 07/27/07
What a tragedy! You certainly nailed this one down good. I wasn't expecting the whole tower to come crashing down. I thought that maybe he couldn't remember his speech or something. good job.
Angela M. Baker-Bridge07/28/07
Good verse to wrap it up!
Delores Baber07/28/07
Good story with a great message. How many people are building their lifes without consideration of the foundation under them, their beliefs, faith, goals. How many people do each of us know who seem to be succeeding but without Christ as their foundation. Their lives will crumble in the end and their efforts come to nought. Good job.
Dee Yoder 07/29/07
This is well written and easily read. The point of your story is clear, too. I like the scripture at the end; it puts a real punch to the problem the architect caused by his error.
Catrina Bradley 07/29/07
Good writing here! I was in shock when the building started sinking. The story might be a bit unbelievable, but you did a good job of telling it. Nicely done!
Pamela Kliewer07/31/07
Great take on the verse you have at the end. I was surprised when the building fell. You kept me interested throughout. Good job.
Joanne Sher 08/03/07
Congratulations, Christopher. Your entry has placed 6th in Level 1. With so many entries in this level, you've really done well. The Lists for the Top 15 in each Level and the Top 40 overall is available in the Weekly Results and Highest Rankings forum of our Faithwriters Message Boards.