The Official Writing Challenge
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07/26/07
Interesting! Be careful when switching POV's, at first it is the mom and then it becomes the daughter in the end. You also do not mention the ages until the mom is remembering her 13th year. I was assuming that the kids were 7-9. Just a note. Good job!
07/26/07
Pretty good job, the POV switch confused me a second, and I had to reread to make sure I had names straight, but the story and theme came through.
07/29/07
Your story is good, and I think your characters are well described. Thanks for sharing it!
07/29/07
Nicely done - the characters and the dialog are great. Keep writing!