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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Happy (07/12/07)

TITLE: A Change of Heart
By Trevas Walker
07/17/07


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“Why me Lord, why can’t I just have it easy like everyone else,” Eric said mostly to himself as he finally started to make his way home.

It had been a horrible day. The day started going wrong on his way to work, the first time in a month he had decided to walk, and it had begun to rain when he was only halfway there. The day at work had started with his boss laying into him. For the entire day after that nothing seemed to go right: the copier broke, his co-workers all seemed as grumpy as the boss, he had lost one of his top accounts, and at the end of the day his key had broken as he tried to lock up the building leaving him to call a locksmith. The whole day had been synonymous with the way his life was going this past year, joyless and sad.

Maybe I am depressed, Eric thought to himself as he walked,I never used to let things get to me like this.

With that thought Eric continued on his walk, he had chosen a different route to get home this time. Rounding the corner he noticed a cedar well sitting in front of a church. The well was for decoration only, but looked real in size and shape. A bucket hung by rope from the spindle that spanned the uprights of the well. On the front of the well hung a small sign, with red lettering, that read “With Joy You Shall Draw from the Wells of Salvation.”

The well and the sign reminded him of his grandmother. Although she was no longer with them, he remembered her well. Grandma May had been a small frail woman, but tough to the core. Her life had been a life of hardship. At twenty-six her husband had died, killed in the war, leaving May to raise four children alone. Through hardship and a troubled life she had always walked with a smile, had lived a life of faith and love. Eric remembered the joy that the woman had spread to everyone who met her.

As he walked Eric pictured the old woman’s face, and remembered one of the things she had said to him the last time he had been with her. It had been a time of struggle in Eric’s life, recovering from a drug addiction, he had stayed with her. As Eric thought back to that time, the day he had been leaving, her words ran through his mind. “Always remember to thank God for what you have Eric, live with love always in your heart. God never promised life would be easy, but he promised to be with us through it all, even when we make mistakes.”

Rounding the corner to home, the sign and the memory still fresh in his mind, Eric remembered all that he had. Although not rich, he had not gone without these past years. He looked at the Victorian style bungalow that he had bought last year when he had moved here. He looked at the new BMW parked in the driveway. At twenty-nine he was doing very well for himself. In his mind he pictured his soon to be wife who was waiting for him inside. Eric realized that, even though life was a struggle sometimes, he was truly blessed.

“Thank you Lord,” Eric said as he opened the door to his house.

“How was your day,” Felicia, Eric’s fiancee, greeted him as he walked into the kitchen.

For the first time in a while Eric saw her beautiful smile for the blessing that it truly was.

“You know, it was great. Best day I have had in a long time,” Eric replied, returning her smile as he pulled her close.


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Joanne Sher 07/21/07
Love the way your MC's life was transformed - and the last line was just right. Enjoyed this very much!
Sharlyn Guthrie07/22/07
Great message, and I liked the tie-in with grandma. Don't forget to use question marks whenever a question is asked, and watch for run-on sentences. Your overall story structure and organization is good. Keep writing!
Dee Yoder 07/22/07
Very nice story here! It had a believable main character and the ending was just right. :) If only we would all practice the glass-half-full way of viewing our lives.
Misti Chancellor07/23/07
Good job! I really liked the grandma's advice. :D
Benjamin Graber07/23/07
I love the ending, Trevas. Keep up the good work!
Verna Cole Mitchell 07/23/07
I love how you carried you character from defeat to victory with the imitation well and reminder of his saintly grandmother. The title was just right.
Catrina Bradley 07/23/07
Nice job! I love his "change of heart" after meditating on his blessings. Great title, and I loved the ending. Only one thing bothered me - I got the impression his fiance was living with him. That might not go over well with a Christian publication. Could just be me, but something to think about. I truly enjoyed your story! Thanks for the blessing. :) Cat
Loren T. Lowery07/25/07
Great writing with a good story of how others can be such a beneficial influence in our lives.
Sherrie Jackson07/25/07
You make a very good point with your story. I think a lot of us get bogged down in immediate bad tidings and forget too easily about our overall blessings. We have to strive to remember the good, and give God the glory.

I do agree with Catrina about the fiance - but it can be easily clarified or fixed, or hey, left alone if you so choose.
Sara Harricharan 07/25/07
A change of heart indeed! I like this. Your description of a day gone 'bad' sounded just like mine today. This was a great pick-me up. The ending was just perfect too. ^_^ Thanks for sharing!
Kristen Hester07/25/07
Nice job. It was fun to watch him have an attitude change when he saw the well and was reminded of his grandmother's wise words. I enoyed this.