The Official Writing Challenge
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I liked this story. It held my attention and was quite a surprise when I figured it out.
07/19/07
Great story and a creative idea. I was worried for the "girl" at the beginning.
I was drawn into the story and wanted to see how it ended. Yes, it was a surprise and I enjoyed it - alhtough I felt tears coming to my eyes. Near the top of the story, you use the word there for they're other than that I think you did a great job. Well written. :O)
07/20/07
Oh my! I can relate to this story because my Dad has Alzheimer's. He still remembers me, but I know he thinks we should all be younger! Good story and great conversation. One thing to watch out for: when you can substitute the words "you are" in the sentence, the spelling should be "you're". (Don't feel bad about the grammar; I have problems with commas, and I use spell-check for everything!) A really touching story!
07/24/07
So poignant. You portrayed her quite well.
07/24/07
This is very well written and I loved the twist at the end. You drew me in right from the beginning. Great Job!
07/24/07
This is an excellent piece of literature and it takes guts to leave stories like this one ends. Loved it. Great writing.
This is excellent storytelling. I was drawn in to the story immediately. Great job.
I enjoyed your story. The twist cloes to the end was great.
08/06/07
read it again for my own enjoyment and just needed to say again: Outstanding writing!
Julie, This is a very touchng story. Being a nurse, I can relate completely! There is a lot of unspoken emotion that accompanies this sort of peice. Thanks.
10/09/07
Julie, I certainly enjoyed this one. It was creative to say the least I can easily relate and the twist at the end was great. I hope that I some day develope the skill to tell a story so well. Gene Hudgens