The Official Writing Challenge
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07/13/07
Oh, how sad. But many times, scripture has been my source of strength in terrible times, also. I could feel the pain the daughter was experiencing as she went to check on her mother.
07/16/07
You did a good job of showing the fear in the Babysister. I'm glad she had a "rock and fortress" to rely on. I was sad to come to the end...I wanted to find out what happened to the mother. It's cute that you call your main character "Babysister". I like that.
I loved this. Very touching and I love the build up of emotion through dialogue,etc. God bless and keep up the beautiful writing. Janice