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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Confident (07/05/07)

TITLE: INFORMAL INSIGHT
By esther robinson
07/10/07


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"With what confidence are you trusting her? Kurt questioned Dan quite curtly.

Dan looked like a dead pan.

Kurt’s voice amplified coupled with exasperation. “Trusting a woman in this field for fortune is not advisable. Come on! What is happening to you?” Sparks of anger like that arising from crackers appeared in his eyes.

Yet Dan stood like a statue.

Kurt picked his bag and proceeded towards the exit door.

"Kurt! Stop it now. Look here. I have not made Golda my hope, or said to her fine Golda, 'You are my confidence.' ” Words came out with equal velocity but in a pleading tone. However, Dan’s eye explicitly revealed that what he uttered were contrary to the contents brewing in his heart.

“Dan! Your eyes can never fail me. You know me better. I heard that Golda is of a crafty character. Are the riches that she’s going to bring then your confidence? Did you ever think about Tom and Cathy’s future?” Kurt confronted.

Both were entrepreneurs. None second to the other in perceiving, planning, projecting and executing. Earlier, their chess game of business would normally end in a draw and seldom a loss-win situation or vice-versa. While Kurt, a believer, now an employee under Dan an atheist are good friends. Culturally, financially and spiritually there did exist differences between them but that never deterred their free exchange of opinions over viewing the portrait of life either from the mountaintop or the valley.

Off late Dan is facing a slump in his business and Golda a rich widow has entered his life. The speculation of many over the marriage of convenience between Dan and Golda turned out as an anticipated Wall Street announcement.

Shortly after this, a few fights followed. Dan hurt Kurt so much so that their friendship faced severe storms, refused to sail smoothly and slowly sank. The cold currents drifted them many miles apart. Finally Kurt left Dan saying, “I trust neither a man nor princes but place my confidence in my Creator. He will keep my foot from secret snares and take me to greater heights. You will not understand what I am talking about now. You will regret your act. Your own mouth will testify this. Those who forget God are hypocrite and they shall perish; their confidence is like trusting a spider’s web for protection, which shall be cut off. Good-bye!”

Twenty years passed by. Kurt and Dan remained rivals like lamb and lion. Although Kurt forgave Dan in his heart yet the hurt by itself could not be forgotten. Both were renowned for their profound contribution as entrepreneurs.

Now, a few of Dan’s belongings considered worthless are with his daughter Cathy born from his first marriage. Dust had deposited like a fine film over a personal diary lying on top of an unused cupboard. A smudged page perhaps a sign of secret and silent tears shed in privacy carries a piece of Dan’s mind “Twenty years down the lane when I think of him, I miss someone very great – a genius, a rare gem. He believes in a God who gave him wisdom. Perhaps He is the secret of his confidence. He would pinpoint exactly that factor which played a dominant role in whatever we foresaw together while I overlooked it. Kurt truly is a very confident man. I failed to acknowledge his views, took him for granted and never ever appreciated him. My pride could not prevail beyond the enemy line. I fail to understand how he could predict the craftiness of Golda. She loved luxury and caused havoc in my life. My children Tom and Cathy suffered on account of her. What is the use of thinking about her who is no more? Time has proved Kurt right and me false. Alas! Those informal insights that he uttered came true. He cautioned but I failed to act on that signal. Rice and husk once separated cannot become paddy again. So is friendship. Together we could have done much more. In life one can leave something for someone but never leave someone for something because something will leave but someone will surely care.”

Unfortunately Dan could not travel the path he had already tread to join hands with Kurt again. That diary, into which he poured the agonies of his heart for receiving temporary comfort invisibly laments but visibly remains motionless.


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Helen Paynter07/12/07
Some interesting ideas in the unusual story. If I have a suggestion, it is that you read your dialogue aloud as you write it, to make sure it sounds plausible. Once or twice I thought they sounde a bit 'bookish.'
Thank you for sharing.
Beth LaBuff 07/15/07
You've created quite an interwoven story. It sounds like it could be real. You've used a lot of good words and description here. Thanks for writing this.