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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Confident (07/05/07)

TITLE: The Day My Wings Were Cut
By Dianne Janak
07/09/07


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The Day My Wings Got Cut

Disclaimer: Before reading this and possibly becoming a tad alarmed, let me put your heart at ease. I am now in recovery, so you can relax. The world is no longer at risk.

I wish I could tell you when and where and how the plan was birthed. When Superman was popular back in my early days, I dreamed of being his female counterpart. My name would be Superdame. Not wanting to fly with a cape the way he did, I had imagined golden wings. It seemed so much more feminine and would alleviate the problem of mid air perspiration.

My mission would be to take on the responsibility of fixing broken people, rescuing victims from their own blind spots, mending their foolish ways to set them on a path to true freedom and happiness. My goal was admittedly lofty, knowing it would take some time, but I would be relentless until the world changed into a happier place.

I needed people to fix in order to validate my existence. I didnít have to look far for toxic, broken, and needy people. They seemed to be everywhere. As I began to bond with them, I was so relieved that I didnít have to go through life with all those blind spots, flaws, and annoying habits. As soon as I perceived an imperfect person in my path, I went to work. I learned to rescue in secret finding out through experience that most people seem to live in denial of their need for me.

At times I encountered conflict and tension. . I know you may find this hard to believe, but some people actually felt a little hostile about my pure and wholesome intent to fix them. Alas, blind people seem oblivious to the big picture. The nasty remarks and angry reactions were a little disturbing, but I got used to it. Adding martyrdom to nobility, I was quite focused though my people projects seemed unaware that I was on a mission to save them from themselves.

Gradually I began to notice a dark cloud forming on my self appointed mission. Putting up a false front, I hid the fact that I had been praying and asking God to show me why joy had eluded me so. I knew I needed joy for strength. Trying so hard to change others was wearing me out. So I turned to God for an answer. Too many times I didnít like what He was saying to me. Things like ďtaking the log out of my own eye first, not judging or I will be judged accordingly.Ē Rather convicting and uncomfortable suggestions like that made me shiver.

One day however I decided to actually listen and obey. My life was transformed. God simply told me to look within my own heart first. I did and was appalled. I could only stand to look at it for a moment. Seeing it broke me into tears of repentance, agony and shame. My own heart was nothing comparable to those I had been trying to rescue. It was a million times worse.

That was the day I asked God to cut my wings. I realized that I was the one who needed changing, and no on could do it but me. I had been interfering with Godís business my whole life and neglecting my own. Itís odd in a funny sort of way that when I meet people now I see possibilities and potential instead of projects to be fixed. My name is Grace, and I am a recovering fixaholic. I will remain in the process of recovery my whole life. That is all I know for now. And for that I am confident.


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Helen Paynter07/12/07
LOL! Mid-air perspiration indeed! I liked this a lot - especially the first 1/2 which had most of the humour. DOn't forget that you can get a serious point across very effectively with humour. I challenge you next time to keep up the humour all the way through!
As it was - fun and telling. I, too am a bit of a recovering fixaholic!
Dee Yoder 07/13/07
Very good writing and an interesting point of view! I think we all lapse into superfixer somewhere along the way! Thanks for reminding me to take out the log in my own eye first. :)
Pamela Kliewer07/14/07
WOW! I like this, a lot! You kept me interested. What a unique perspective. Good job!
Cathy Kane07/15/07
Really enjoyed this piece. What a lesson we can learn from Grace!

I like your style - very easy to read. You kept my attention throughout the entire story.

This was a nice twist on this week's challenge. Unique and different. Great job!
Lynda Schultz 07/17/07
Very good point and very nicely written.
Kristen Hester07/18/07
Very nice! I really liked your beginning with the clear image of a female superhero. Very fun.

Just a suggestion: I would have liked to see the narrator in action trying to fix someone. Show us a fun situation where she is busy at work. Then she can realize her own problem and her need to first work on herself.

This is good. I like your writing style.
joe hodson07/18/07
Creative and I like your voice. I especially like the disclaimer. Good job!
Sara Harricharan 07/18/07
I think you nailed this one! Great job. I love the dry humor and especially the superheroine bit. Excellent imagery and lesson. ^_^
Elizabeth Baize 07/18/07
I loved the disclaimer!! I had a preconceived idea of what this might be about, so that sentence opened up my mind to your story. You might consider putting in some dialogue between you and one of your "patients" to give this even more appeal. I have a feeling you could bring in some fun humor along with it. I really like how you brought home such an important lesson from such a unique point of view.
Patty Wysong07/18/07
Oh, I loved this!!! It was wonderful. The disclaimer at the beginning totally threw me off and sucked me in. I was hooked. Then the voice, it was perfect. The ending, 'I am Grace a....' Too Good!! I loved it. :D Beyond that, and more importantly, it packed a wallop. A stinging wallop. Excellent!! :D
dub W07/19/07
A good read, pretty well written. A note about writing first person - be careful with the number of "I" pronouns.
Joanne Sher 07/19/07
What a great voice! I really enjoyed this - and you made a wonderful point!
Verna Cole Mitchell 07/19/07
Excellent story! Congratulations on being highly commended.
Sara Harricharan 07/19/07
***Congrats on your highly commended!***
Mo 07/19/07
Very good! Congrats on your Highly Commended!
David Butler 07/20/07
Hey! I really like your sense of humour, and it's so well expressed. I wonder if you could write a series on the "Adventures of Superdame of the Golden Wings"?
Ways to improve it? Hmmm.. a tough one. I think the voices of experience (above) have said it all, and I agree. A bit of dialogue would help, using that delightful dry touch to it. Carrying the humour to the end wouldn't lose the seriousness of the message, true, but the occasional isolated bit of heartache expressed can add some more dynamics to it.
But I really liked it. Congratulations on yr placing!
Verna Cole Mitchell 09/02/07
This very well written entry would be a good one to send to "God Accepts U-Turns."