The Official Writing Challenge
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06/17/07
Good story and I like hearing it from the male point of view. Teens could learn from this one!
Ooohh I really enjoyed reading this...well done :D I really liked the ending...I didn't expect that!!
06/20/07
Great message! What an admirable young man.
06/20/07
Good story, and you took an approach that no one else did this week. Well done!

A few spelling and punctuation errors--this just needs a quick "buff and polish."

Refreshing to read from a boy's POV, and with realistic dialog.
I liked your story very much--thought the title was a good fit.
06/20/07
I like the part about every man needs a saviour. Thanks for sharing this part of the spirit with us readers. Well done. There are a few grammar issues but the storyline made me overlook them:) Share this with other men in your position!
06/20/07
Nice title! I like how you tie it in with the ending. Very nice. I liked this fresh look on a Teen story, very creative. Good job.
06/23/07
Great story - and I believe teens would "dig" it the most. Just a few comma's here and there - minor little things...and you're on your way! Really impressive!