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06/14/07
A very poignant, well written story that carried me all the way through, and I loved the ending. Your story speaks to the grieving heart, whether it be the loss of spouse, parent or child. God bless.
Very, very well written. I enjoyed this alot.
06/15/07
Well written and poignant story!
06/16/07
Oh, this is a gem! Fabulous writing, so skillful and what an engaging voice. One thing - we find out too late in the tale the gender of the MC (unless I missed it). I was picturing her as a "he". :) I'd suggest maybe introducing that earlier, but otherwise don't change a thing. LOVE it! :)
06/16/07
Beautiful memory of a loved one...but not exactly in the genre of teenagers (in my humble opinion) - but lovely. Thanks for sharing.
06/16/07
Absolutely beautiful, very heartfelt. Thank you for sharing.
WOW! This one is ecxellent! You did a wonderful job expressing emotion...
06/16/07
Lovely and beautiful. Great description here!
Wonderful, emotionally healing, piece. Possibly could work for young adults.
Beautiful story!
06/20/07
Excellent writing; you won't be in Beginner's for long. My only suggestion would be to tighten it up a bit, to give room for letting the reader know specifically what happened, and why the daisy-leaver feels such guilt. Teens would really get into that, and they dislike having to infer.

This is great stuff!
06/20/07
Amazing! Wonderful descriptions, I like how you played on the one feeling of guilt and all the comparisons in between. Just my opinion, I think some italics would've helped to define the one-liners a little more. Just a thought. But the title was good and the touch of the daisies-excellent. ^_^
Your descriptions are superb. This is an outstanding piece.