The Official Writing Challenge
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Good learning story. Children should relate to this.
06/12/07
Oh, this story is very sweet. I like the POV of your main character and how she finally comes to an understanding about her Daddy's role. Good job!
Excellent lesson for children that you can still be happy without everything being perfect...very good story.
06/13/07
You captured the reading level and the interest level perfectly for your intended age group. This was melancholy and sweet.
What a sweet,touching story. I enjoyed the message!
06/13/07
Very powerful and heartfelt.
I really like this and little ones could relate to this. I know our daughter never wants daddy to work either but after reminding her of what he works for, so we can eat, buy clothes and toys ..."she settles down more.She even piped up one day and said,"I want to save my money so I can help pay bills and get groceries."What about toys I asked?"We have enough toys momma."She was learning!:0) Agan, great story hon.Janice
This is a sweet story. I liked how the little girl realized how things were and did not whine--a good lesson for other children.
06/13/07
WOW! Touching, sweet and so wonderfully written! LOVE IT!
06/13/07
A good story wit a good lesson for younger children to relate to. ^_^