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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Write something suitable for CHILDREN (05/31/07)

TITLE: Sometimes Daddy Has to Work
By Laisa Jones


Sarah was sad. She hugged her mommy and went out to the bus stop.

It was a long, long day at school. First, she had to hand in the paper to her teacher.

The paper that had no mark on it. It could only be marked if Daddy would be a helper next week, on the field trip.

Sarah was sad all day, because Daddy could not go with her on field trip day. Daddy could not be a parent helper, because he had to work.

Her feet hurt a little, which made this sad day worse. It reminded her, though, of Mommyís soft words. She needed new shoes, and so did her brother. If Daddy did not work on field trip day, to buy shoes would be much harder. Mommy said that Daddy really wanted to go with her, but a whole day of work he could not miss.

Sarah was still sad. She wanted new shoes that would not pinch and hurt, but a field trip without Daddy could be no fun at all. Teacher said they would drive up the mountain, to go exploring and hiking. Outdoor classes could be fun, if only Daddy were there.

Her feet hurt more, at the end of this sad, long day, and Sarah got back on the bus. She sat down and sighed with relief. She thought about hiking on the field trip next week, and she didnít think she could stand hiking in the shoes on her feet. Even if Daddy were there, to hike in shoes that hurt so much could be no fun at all.

Sarah came in from the bus stop and hugged her mommy. She smiled to show that she was not so sad anymore. Daddy would be missed on field trip day, but she needed new shoes, and so did her brother. If Daddy had to work, it did not mean he did not love her. It did not mean he did not want to go with her.

Since Teacher said they would go hiking, Mommy said they needed to go shopping. Sarah needed shoes that would not pinch and hurt, and outdoor classes could be fun, even if Daddy would not be there.

Mommy said she was so proud of Sarah, because she wiped her tears and stood so brave in her new shoes, when Daddy went to work on field trip day.

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Jacquelyn Horne06/09/07
Good learning story. Children should relate to this.
Dee Yoder 06/12/07
Oh, this story is very sweet. I like the POV of your main character and how she finally comes to an understanding about her Daddy's role. Good job!
Joy Faire Stewart06/12/07
Excellent lesson for children that you can still be happy without everything being perfect...very good story.
Jan Ackerson 06/13/07
You captured the reading level and the interest level perfectly for your intended age group. This was melancholy and sweet.
Kristen Hester06/13/07
What a sweet,touching story. I enjoyed the message!
Joanne Sher 06/13/07
Very powerful and heartfelt.
Janice Fitzpatrick06/13/07
I really like this and little ones could relate to this. I know our daughter never wants daddy to work either but after reminding her of what he works for, so we can eat, buy clothes and toys ..."she settles down more.She even piped up one day and said,"I want to save my money so I can help pay bills and get groceries."What about toys I asked?"We have enough toys momma."She was learning!:0) Agan, great story hon.Janice
Verna Cole Mitchell 06/13/07
This is a sweet story. I liked how the little girl realized how things were and did not whine--a good lesson for other children.
Rita Garcia06/13/07
WOW! Touching, sweet and so wonderfully written! LOVE IT!
Dara Sorensen06/13/07
A good story wit a good lesson for younger children to relate to. ^_^