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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Write something suitable for CHILDREN (05/31/07)

TITLE: Something Awful is Lurking About
By Jennie Hilligus
05/31/07


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The lights of the moon lingered peacefully dim.
The house was now silent, for all were tucked in.
When in a split second, from no where at all
Came a terrible cry and a beckoning call.

From down a dark hallway a young boy said,
I saw something AWFUL right under my bed!
Dad gallantly scurried to rescue the boy;
Bumping kneecaps and toes on every stray toy.

I saw him! the boy cried. Hes horribly green,
With huge eyes and mouth that look violently mean.
Please do something QUICK! Get him out of my room.
Hell probably eat us if you dont find him soon!

So Dad knelt on one knee and he took a deep breath.
Then bravely he peaked though expecting his death.
But what he discovered, as he hastened to see,
Was a poor alligator more frightened than he.

Why do you tremble and refuse to come out?
Dad fretfully asked, as he tugged on his snout.
The scared gator sniffled and began to explain,
Well how would you feel to be called such names?

My mouth and my tail may be large, that is true.
And my color may not be exactly like you.
But thats really no reason to make up your mind,
And assume that Im awful and must be unkind.

The boy hung down awkwardly over the bed,
He felt quite ashamed for all he had said.
My name is Edgar, he spoke with a grin,
I just got to thinking, would you be my friend?

Then the gator slid shyly from under the bed.
He held out his claw and said, Hi there, Im Ted!
From that moment on, the two played quite nice.
They discovered that all should heed this advice.

Dont ever judge others by how they might seem.
Just give em a chance to be part of your team.
And whats most important without a doubt;
You may like the fellow whos lurking about!


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Janice Cartwright06/07/07
Another winner! Boy are those judges in for a quandry this time! So far I've read two and both have been pure delight. Your poem is absolutely amazing and I loved it's message to children!
Loretta Leonard06/07/07
I really appreciate someone who can write good poetry. I like the topic and the way that you handled it. To have the "monster" under the bed become best friends with Ted is a novel idea.
Nancy Jo Wilson06/08/07
This poem was very delightful. My nine year old would enjoy it.
Janice Fitzpatrick06/08/07
Well done.Wonderful piece!:0) I absolutely love poetic verse and you have captured the readers attention with suspense and yet added humor. I like the ending too and think this would make a great children's book. I can see it illustrated. I would love to do the artwork for this. My lifelong dream is to be a writer/illustator as I love to paint and draw as much as write. Again, great work. God bless your gift. Janice
Jacquelyn Horne06/09/07
Very good poetry for children. Good pov.
Beth S. Biermann06/13/07
I loved the rhythm of the poem and the wonderful lesson at the end. Very cleverly done.
Kristen Hester06/14/07
What a great poem. Kids will love this! Congratulations on making the EC list. Great job!
Sheri Gordon06/14/07
Congratulations. A great message in a very cute poem. This would have great illustrations.
Mo 06/14/07
Very good!
Gail Blackwell06/21/07
Great title and charming story! I love to read children's stories written in rhyme. Well done!