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Good story. Children would surely get the message. There are a few punctuation errors and once those are fixed it would be good for a Christian childrens magazine.
Good article on friendship and resposibility.
06/07/07
Good message to the story. You may want to make the MC a bit older. Five-year-olds usually don't go to the store themselves.
06/13/07
Cute story and good message.