The Official Writing Challenge
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Beautiful story. Spacing would make it easier to read. Would make a great devotional piece.
Good inspirational. It would read better if each person's quote was on a line of it's own. This was told with insight on how little ones react.
Very touching and sweetly told. Other than some punctuation this is very well done! I really like this. It captured my heart as I was drawn in and I love the ending. Bravo! Lord bless your insight and keep on writing. I thoroughly enjoyed this. Janice
06/10/07
The title caught my attention (NOT because it was on top of the list!)
I've had to be corrected about spacing and punctuation, too, so I won't comment on that. :-)
Excellent story, with a very pertinent point made for us fathers - as well as appealing to ... older children?
06/11/07
Touching story, reminding us all to take the time to answer with thought our children's questions, and to answer them with God's answers. I wonder how many moments like that I've missed being too busy or too distracted by every day life.

Your story would be much easier to read if you started a new paragraph each time someone speaks. In the case of these cut and paste internet things - that means double space.
06/21/07
GREAT STORY