The Official Writing Challenge
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06/01/07
A precious little allegory, would make a good dramatic reading.

I'm not sure you need the little address to the reader at the end--maybe a bit anti-climactic. Trust your writing (it's very good) to stir up those questions in the reader.
06/02/07
I very much enjoyed reading this

Your article made me think of
1 Corinthians 13:13 And now these three remain: faith, hope and love. But the greatest of these is love. (NIV)

What a very interesting and creative thought. This was very nice.
06/02/07
This story truly gripped me. It was thought provoking; as it made me rifle through my own life choices as I read. Great creativity.
Very well written; keeps attention to the end- not sure of pre-existence in heaven, but the ideas are great.
06/10/07
I was a judge this week and really enjoyed your story! Keep it up!