The Official Writing Challenge
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There's a lot of good writing here. But I don't seem to understand the plot of the story. Maybe a little more explanation is in order here. But the play on words is very good.
06/02/07
Lots of excitement here!

I was mildly distracted by the name "Broth," couldn't get past thinking of soup, but that's probably because I'm dieting...

This reads like more.
Action filled. What an adventure. I did want to know where they were going and why the attack. I can assume and think it's a spiritual thing, but more explanation would have been appreciated. Nice job.