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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Write in the ADVENTURE genre (05/24/07)

TITLE: Mission Possible Momma
By Kristen Hester
05/28/07


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I crouched behind the dumpster and tried to ignore the pungent odor. I shifted the large bag on my shoulder and as I did, lost my balance. I fell backwards onto my fanny with a thump. I heard a “squish”. I had landed on a mustard packet. After the events of the morning, I wasn’t even fazed by the yellow blotch on the back side of my white capris. It was imperative I accomplish my mission. It was Thursday, and time was running out.

I reached into my bag for my spy glass, but quickly realized I had a tampon up to my eye. I found the spy glass and aimed it at the door of the university library. I looked at my watch.
At any moment my target would descend from the building. I had been through a lot to get to this point.

The morning had begun normally, whatever that meant for a woman in my position. Currently I am training three future leaders. I am responsible for their safety. It is a task I do not take lightly. Today my first assignment was to transport them to their off-base instructional institution by 8:00 a.m.

As I drove them to their instructional institution, they announced their hunger. I pulled into a drive-thru restaurant and ordered three 99 cent breakfast sandwiches and an extra grande mocha cappuccino for myself. I tossed the sandwiches over my shoulder as I pulled back into traffic. I smiled proudly that each of the three were able to catch their sandwich and begin eating without taking their eyes off their detective training video, “Blue’s Clues”, which was playing on the car’s DVD player.

We were half way to the school when someone yelled out, “I have to go potty.”

“We’re almost there,” I responded, trying to gage the seriousness of the situation.

“I have to go NOW!” The young one demanded. I knew the tone. He meant NOW. But I’m not a rookie and I was prepared. I carried a potty chair, an essential survival tool, in my car. I pulled into a gas station parking lot and the young protégée did his business. Both kinds, I might add. We then proceeded toward our destination, this time with the windows down.

We had made it a few more miles down the road when I heard a small voice say, “It stinks in here. I think I am going to be sick.” I evaluated the threat level and determined that action was required. No problem. The windows were already down. I knew I must make the ultimate sacrifice. I quickly emptied my extra grand mocha cappuccino out the window and handed the young boy my cup. He knew the drill and threw up in the cup. Thankfully, I had ordered an extra grande coffee because he filled that baby up. He passed the cup back up to me and I returned it to the cup holder, making a mental note not to sip from it again. That’s a mistake you only make once.

The rest of the ride proceeded without incident. As I watched my three trainees enter the building safely, me cell phone rang. I knew from the caller ID read out that it was my greatest ally calling. She was assisting me in a very important mission.

“I have a name,” my ally began. “I wouldn’t give you this information if I didn’t trust you completely,” she continued. “Guard this information with your life and do not share it with anybody. I have it from a good source that others are on to her as well, so you have no time to waste. She’s studying at the library right now, but she has class at 8:15, so she won’t be there long.”

I couldn’t risk someone getting to her before me. I had to cut her off between the library and class. I hit the gas, sloshing the contents of the potty and my coffee cup. It didn’t matter. I must accomplish my mission.

That’s why I was crouched down behind the dumpster waiting for my target to leave the library. I spotted her as she walked out of the building. I jumped up, dusted myself off, and started across the street toward her.

“Kara,” I yelled. The girl looked momentarily confused and then I saw recognition flash in her eyes.

“Hello, Mrs. Smith. What are you doing here?” Kara asked.

“Can you babysit Friday night?” I asked.

“Sure.”

Mission Accomplished.


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Sharon Henderson 05/31/07
Too cute! One day in the lifelong adventure of motherhood.
Patricia Sprague06/01/07
Your title caught my interest. Very good writing. I enjoyed reading it.It made me smile!
Jennifer Wetter06/02/07
I couldn't help but laugh as I read your entry. It was enjoyable and completely unxpected, just as children themselves. Congrats on such a great read.
Jan Ackerson 06/02/07
Wonderful voice, charming story.
Jacquelyn Horne06/03/07
Humorous piece.
dub W06/03/07
Nice humor. A word of note. First person is difficult to write because of the temptation to use "I". A good rewrite and this is a winner in my book.
Mo 06/04/07
Very good!!
Verna Cole Mitchell 06/06/07
I liked your surprise ending to this eventful adventure.
Joanne Sher 06/06/07
Such fun! I think all moms can relate - I love the ending!
Betty Castleberry06/06/07
I'm still smiling. It's been awhile, but I remember those days. Nicely done.
Pat Guy 06/06/07
OH! THIS-IS-A-GEM!

The wit is perfect! And it's just sooo good!

GREAT job! Wow!
Sara Harricharan 06/06/07
LOL! This is simply too funny! I was chuckling all the way through. I can see this whole story devloping into a mystery novel with the mom as a secret agent. Great writing here! I love your style. ^_^
Myrna Noyes06/06/07
Thoroughly well-written and fun story! I loved your descriptions, and the ending was cute! GREAT JOB!! :)
Rita Garcia06/07/07
Love it, I look forward to the priviledge of reading more of your fantastic writing!
Cassie Memmer06/07/07
Great job! I LOVE your voice. This is so creative and unique. The suspense builds throughout. Congratulations on your #1 EC win! Marvelous writing! And so fun!
Sara Harricharan 06/07/07
***CONGRATS!***
Benjamin Graber06/07/07
LOL, this one is such a cute story. Congratulations on first!
Leigh MacKelvey06/07/07
What in the world are you doing in Beginners? This was fnatastic! Congratulations on your level and EC 1st place win! Wow!
Dara Sorensen06/07/07
That was so creative, so fresh, so funny! Great job and congrats on your win!
James Clem 06/07/07
Wow - very impressive win! Very good writing - a bit too much on the details side for my sensitivities. It's all Too believable - and I don't want to think about it. (shudder) Congrats!
Myrna Noyes06/07/07
CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved win! I'm not surprised! :)
Helen Paynter06/07/07
Very funny - a well-deservved win. Congratulations.
Sally Hanan06/08/07
Congratulations -- you did the almost impossible by winning as a beginner :) but you really deserved the win. I wa a judge, and loved every bit of this story. You thought it out detail by detail and your descriptions were hilarious.
Dixie Phillips 06/08/07
This is sheer delight! The best part to me was to find out you were waiting (patiently, of course) for the BABYSITTER. What a hoot!
Sheri Gordon06/12/07
Congratulations -- and very much deserved. This is hilarious -- and quite an adventure. I loved the POV. Great job.
Lynda Lee Schab 06/30/07
Kristin,

I'm a little delayed in commenting but I was judge for this challenge and I had to pop in and say how much I loved it! From the tampon in the eye to the surprise ending, it had me smiling. It didn't surprise me one bit that it took first place - and for a "Beginner" that was quite an accomplishment. Congrats!
Blake Bettis07/02/07
This was a good read! I enjoyed your wit. The ending was great, very humorous! Congratulations!
Ed VanDeMark07/18/07
Great story. I missed this gem the first time around. I got to it because you commented on my current entry "Christian Genetics". Your humor is real. Real is like maple syrup compared to most writers Mrs. Butterworth's version. I hope you found this comment. Sometimes it's a bear figuring out where the feedback comments are hiding. Skip over intermediate and move forward to advanced. God bless you and the four little ones, your humor will keep you sane.
Laury Hubrich 08/28/07
I was perusing and found this and I am glad I did! How hilarious!! You did a great job keeping me on my toes. I had no clue what you would come up with next. Probably my favorite on FW so far!
Chely Roach04/02/08
Kristen~THIS WAS HILARIOUS. The tampon, the potty chair, the extra large mocha puke cup (which I have had to do with morning sickness); all were details that made a humorous story pee-a-little-in-your-pants funny! I am so glad this was linked in your interview:)


   
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