The Official Writing Challenge
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Oh, I'm tired! I can't imagine even trying this. When you (we) fell, I was done for.
06/02/07
Whew! I'm breathless just reading this.

A few small errors: shining/shinning and some time/sometime. Fix those, and a few punctuation errors, and you've got a great little piece to keep as a tribute to Jess and adventure.
I felt your sense of accomplishment when you reached the top. What an adventure. Mountain climbing is much harder than it looks. Thanks!