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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Write in the POETRY genre (05/17/07)

TITLE: The Miracle I Want to See
By Dee Yoder
05/18/07


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My Dad, he speaks and smiles at me, and that surprises me, you see,
because he hasnít said a word for many weeks.

Is this the miracle, I ask, as I go about my task
of turning down the sheets upon his bed.

I brush his teeth; comb his hair; place the pads upon his chair,
and wonder why his days have come to this.

But now I have a piece of hope, a bit of that elusive rope
to hold on to on days he slips away.

The miracle I want to see is the Dad I knew returned to me;
the mighty man I knew through childhood days.

The simple words he spoke tonight have brought hope home as if it might
be generous and give him back his life.

I am an optimist at this, a daughter with a wistful wish,
I cast upon the eveningís twinkling stars.

I say my prayers, I bend my will to wait for God to move and still
I want to press Him with this one request:

The miracle I want to see is the Dad I knew returned to me;
the mighty man my grown-up heart still needs.

My Dad, he speaks and smiles at me, and that surprises me, you see,
because I love him more the more I wait.


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Sharon Henderson05/24/07
I want to see the miracle with you...well written...you pulled me completely in.
Jacquelyn Horne05/24/07
I can feel the need you have here to, once again, see a loving father as he was.
Rhonda Clark 05/26/07
Sweet, sweet tribute filled with sadness. Easy to read and visualize. Wonderful.
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/26/07
I like this very much. There's a very sweet yearning here for a daughter to have her father restored. You expresses the emotion beautifully.
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/26/07
oops,since I can't edit her, that would be "expressed."
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/26/07
I give up...Since I can't edit here!
Rita Garcia05/26/07
Heartfelt, heartwarming and so well written. This really touched me on so many levels. Blessings!
Helen Paynter05/26/07
There's a beautiful lilt to this touching poem. Innovative meter, too. Well done.
Pat Guy 05/26/07
Wow! This is awesomely written. This beautiful, lovely and VERY talented.

Wow!
Mo 05/26/07
Wow, very nice.
dub W05/27/07
Touching and sweet.
william price05/27/07
Two thumbs up. If I had a third thumb, it would be three.
Great job!
God bless.
Venice Kichura05/27/07
WOW! Such a sweet tribute to a dear father! This is exceptionally welll-written!
Leigh MacKelvey05/27/07
I loved it too. I can relate so well and those of us who are caring, or have cared for a parent, know the emotions so beautifully written.
Marilee Alvey05/27/07
What a simple, sweet, heartfelt poem. Everyone can relate to this, from one angle or another. Thanks for putting your heart's whispered wish on paper. Super job.
Donna Emery05/27/07
This is a sweet and poignant poem. I can sense your sincerity and love the simple power of your great words.
Joanne Sher 05/27/07
Lovely and heartfelt. This touched me so much! Great job.
Benjamin Graber05/27/07
This is a sweet poem...
Christine Dunn05/28/07
You really have a gift and a flair for poetry. This was a very touching poem. I look forward to hearing more from you.
Dara Sorensen05/29/07
Very sweet. :-) It makes me think of my mom and how she cared for my grandpa in his later days.
Catrina Bradley 05/30/07
I love the hope and the love that shine through simple words so eloquently put together. Nice job!
dub W05/30/07
Very touching.
Patty Wysong05/30/07
Now I need a tissue. Heartfelt and poignant.
Beth LaBuff 06/04/08
Knowing a little background on this makes it all the more beautiful and poignant. It's wonderful.