The Official Writing Challenge
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05/19/07
You've got some great descriptions in here. A little work on grammar would make this piece a bit easier to read. I was intrigued and interested from beginning to end. Keep writing!
This story was good. The last line, however, was confusing to me, and the punctuation needs attention. But all else was well written.