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This is a good story. However, I don't think you mean to use the word "detrimental" here. Detrimental means "harmful". Other than that, this is very well written.
05/11/07
An interesting story and a very insightful look into an event that many might not know about. Nice work
05/15/07
Very interesting story. The dialogue was good and kept the story flowing nicely.

A little more editing for puctuation -- specifically, commas -- would make this a smoother read. (And I caught "detrimental" as well -- perhaps you meant something like "beneficial?")

I really like this because it's original -- different than a lot of the historical stories. Good job.
OOPS! I most definitely used the wrong word. When I merged two paragraphs to keep within the word count I should have re-read a little closer. Thanks for catching it!