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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Write in the HISTORICAL genre (05/03/07)

TITLE: Prairie
By Dee Yoder
05/09/07


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I run through the field and the sharp dry weeds poke the bottom of my feet. I feel the edges of the saw grass sting my shins. In my ears, is the rushing sound of the wind as it picks up and the rain smells sharp in it. I can hear the sound of my brother running behind me with Gyp at his heels. In the distance are the faint voices of my mother and my pa calling us to the sod house we have built on the prairie. Without even seeing their faces I know they are anxious.

“John, hurry.” I puff.
“My legs are hurting and my side is aching”, he cries.
“I know, but I can tell mother and pa are worried about us.” I can barely speak for the effort to keep running, to keep John moving ahead.

In my mind are the memories of the past; especially the burials of my two sisters. We dressed them each in their best clothes; dresses that had been carefully folded in Ohio before our long journey to the west. My mother struggled to let them go. I see her in my mind, skinny and frail, pulling the trunk out from the corner, searching through the meager clothing stored inside. We had dreamed of one day pulling those Sunday garments out in our new settlement, to wear to our new church, in our new life on the prairie.

Things had not gone as we’d planned. It was much harsher, much lonelier, much harder to make a daily life than we had ever thought it would be. The winter had tried to kill us all, but had managed to slip away with the two weakest before retreating into history. Now the season of rain and wind and hope had breathed down on us. But it was hard to see any hope in mother’s eyes. Her face wore the chiseled, guarded squint of loss. Her words were sharp and focused on plain living with no thoughts wasted on the beautiful, the extraordinary. I was stunned by her reply the first time I called to her to come and listen to the meadowlark that was newly returned. She had appeared at the Soddy door, her face red and perspiring from her work. I could see she was cross with me.

“There’ll be a hundred more meadowlarks to listen to before the summer’s done, Lydia. Don’t be bothering me about things like that.”

I’d watched her go back inside as if she were a stranger. My mother had been beautiful and happy and full of life before we started out on this journey. I wanted her back. I missed the way she used to pull me down beside her to examine nature up close. She’d never minded being interrupted before. Now, she worried about everything. Now, when I coughed in the night, I heard my mother stir. I felt her breath on my cheek and her hand graze my forehead. Some nights, she couldn’t resist waking me to ask if I was all right.

So we run to her and Pa, to calm her fears and to see his weary shoulders sag in relief. He turns to her. He pulls her to him and says with a faint smile, “See, they’re fine. Children must play, Anna, they must run and have time to dream.”
He comes to meet us and playfully tousles our hair. He says to her, “They need to be out of our sight, sometimes, to be happy to come home again, Anna.”

Mother raises her face to the late afternoon clouds. Her eyes seem to be searching the sky for the others. For a moment, her mouth trembles. Tears form but she blinks them away again and again. Her face softens, the hard squint slackens, and a small smile tilts her lips upward. The meadowlark sings his spring song and mother looks at me. She reaches out her hand to draw me near.
“Let’s go see if we can find that old bird, Lydia,” she says quietly.

I look behind me as mother and I walk into the field. Gyp is nipping and pulling at John’s pants. Pa is watching us walk away. I raise my hand and wave. He waves back. He gathers his tools and returns to his work.

We are making our life on the prairie; we are planting our hopes and dreams in this soil. Sometimes, they are watered with our tears.


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Alfreda Byars05/11/07
This is good writing, and a very fine story. It brought memories back to me of my grandmother's farm. I was ready to read more.
Donna Emery05/11/07
Very sweet memories etched in wonderful word pictures. Nice work!
Jacquelyn Horne05/11/07
Very good story. Well written and interesting. A winner in my book.
Myrna Noyes05/11/07
I really enjoyed reading this story, and I especially loved the last two lines! Your description of the hardness of prairie life long ago was excellent, and you clearly showed how trials can change people. Good job! :)
Sheri Gordon05/15/07
I loved hearing this from the young girl's voice. I felt her despair for her mother.

The word "had" is used a number of places in your story where it could probably just be eliminated.

Nice snapshot picture of the rough prairie life. Good job.
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/17/07
This is beautifully written, and was my favorite of the beginners' entries this week!
Janice Cartwright 06/18/07
Don't know how I missed reading this one for the historical challenge! It is wonderful! The prairie came alive in every sense and so did your characters. Excellent writing.
Sharlyn Guthrie 06/25/07
This is very good writing. Your descriptions are breathtaking. When you edit I might suggest adding more dialogue as a way of showing rather than telling. But I'd hate to see you change it much at all.
Joanne Sher 06/26/07
This is absolutely captivating. I don't know that I'd change a thing, personally. This touched me deeply.
Loren T. Lowery 06/27/07
I love your writing style and your ability to tell stories that seem so real. IMHO, you definetly have a gift for this genre and I would like to see stories such as this expanded so that we could get to know more about all the characters.


   
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