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An interesting story with believable characters. Nice work!
This is a good example of what might have happened in the wilderness. I don't think you need the last paragraph. The story stands on its own. It is very good.
That's awesome! Great way to communicate a well worn Bible story - you made it relevant to today. As usual - excellant descriptions made the desert palatable.
You put a fresh twist on oneof my favorite Bible stories. Nicely done!
This is a creative re-telling of an old story; good job!
I enjoyed your fresh take on this story...well done!
Wow! This was great. It truly held my attention and it flowed nicely.
This is pretty good ... and a great reminder to us all! Keep at it!
Very creative take on this! You definitely had me fooled. Great conclusion too. Nice job, and keep writing!