The Official Writing Challenge
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Real depth of writing here - you skilfully plunge the reader into deep emotions and experiences. SOme of your sentences are very long - which may be deliberate - it gives the writing a sort of breathless quality, especially in the third paragraph, which I thought was masterful. But if you hadn't deliberately intended the long sentences, beware of the danger when you write. Good stuff, and I'm glad it had a happy ending.
Wonderful story. I could feel her disgust of herself and her pain for the situation. How nice to be loved without judgment. Good writing.
This was very deep. I loved your writing style, very good visualization.
Very intense scene here, and you described it vividly. Nice work