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Topic: Write in the ROMANCE genre (04/19/07)
TITLE: The Surprise
By Esther Gellert
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“Just like my life, huh,” she muttered. “Sometimes I feel up, but mostly, just this miserable down.”
She’d had a perfectly normal, rushed morning. Beginning with the rush to get Tom’s lunch ready and see him off to work with a smile, and followed by an hour of hectic rushing around as she made school lunches and nagged at Alexis and Cody to get ready for school. Jai had done his usual carry-on, crying and complaining when she had tried to make him use the potty. They were late for school, again.
When she reached the supermarket it was crowded. The ‘sale items’ were already sold out and Jai grizzled the whole time.
“Thank goodness it’s Jai’s ‘special afternoon’ with Nanna,” Angela had thought as, with a sigh of relief, she watched Nanna back out of the driveway. Jai waved joyfully from his booster seat in the back of Nanna’s car.
Angela squeezed out her teabag, grabbed a piece of cake and sat down for a moment to gather her thoughts.
Unexpectedly, she felt tears begin to prick the back of her eyes. A moment later she found herself slumped on the floor, face buried in the sofa, sobbing.
“Oh, Lord,” she cried. “What’s wrong with me? I feel so lonely Lord. I feel so unloved. God, do you think Tom still loves me? Does he even SEE me anymore? Does he notice me? Am I anything to him any more? Other than a cook and a babysitter, that is.” There was silence for a moment before she continued. “I know you love me Lord. Please fill me with your love and help me to go on.”
Angela sat with her head on the sofa for several minutes until, as her sobbing eased, she felt God fill her with peace and a certainty that he was in control. She got up, dried her eyes and went to rinse her mug out.
As she was folding the clean washing she heard a car pull into the driveway. She glanced at her watch, wondering who it could be at this time of day.
A moment later Tom burst into the room and grabbed her in a bear hug, planting an excited kiss on her lips. “You look beautiful today, Angie. I love that colour blue on you.” He paused a moment, gazing into her eyes before continuing. “Come on, my beautiful wife. Pack your bags and let’s go.” He released her and started pulling an overnight bag out of the cupboard as he spoke.
“What? …Huh? I … What are you talking about Tom? I’m not going anywhere. I have to pick the kids up from school in an hour.”
“Not tonight my beloved.” Tom grinned. “Nanna’s picking them up. It’s all arranged. You and I…” He took her face in his hands and looked deep into her eyes.
“You and I are having a weekend away. Just us. No kids. I noticed you’ve been looking a little down lately and I thought you might need a little holiday. I hope you don’t mind if I come too.”
He kissed her again, gently and tenderly, but with a promise of more to come. “Have I told you lately that I love you?” he asked.
“Thankyou Lord,” Angela whispered as she began to shove some clothes in a bag.
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