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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Write in the HUMOR genre (04/12/07)

TITLE: The Secret
By Whitnie Henderson
04/19/07


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Psst! Hey! You. Yes you, over here. I have something to tell you. Something I need to get off my chest. Iím just dying to tell someone, and even though I donít know you, I can trust you to keep a secret, right? Whew! Itís hard keeping secrets. Yeah, I know, I shouldnít share, but what good is a secret if you donít tell anyone?

I know things. People trust me to keep their confidences. I usually donít, but they never know who shared because Iím not the only one they share it with. The people they tell, tell two people, who tell two people and so on. Then you end up with a secret that everybody knows.

So why go around acting like itís a big deal to have or know a secret or keep one. Iím all about keeping it real. And anyway, this one is huge and I just want to get it off my chest. By the way, whatís your name? I would feel much more comfortable sharing this with an old friend than some stranger I just met on the street, even if thatís the truth.

Okay, so here it is. The big banana. The whole enchilada. Everything I know about the universe and life. If I tell you, what are you going to do with the information? Are you going to tell anyone? I need to know if you are going to share this with anyone else, after all that is the whole key to whether I can trust you or not.

Youíre probably thinking Iím off my rocker, have a few loose screws, a driveway that doesnít reach the street or a light on and nobodyís home, or something like that. Itís not true. Well one night I was at home reading a book and got this craving for ice cream and there wasnít any. So I went to the store and left the lights on. Sorry, thatís a tangent. I was just saying that there have been times when the light was on and nobody was home. But that isnít all the time.

The point is - Iím not crazy. I just have something I really want to share that I think will change the world. Itís really important, but if I tell you and you tell someone and they tell someone, then Iím not sure that Iíll get the benefit. Itís like those infomercials where someone is selling get rich quick secrets. Donít you ever wonder why they donít just use the system themselves? And if they sell it to everybody else, who is left to actually use the system to get rich? Well, this is kind of like that.

Once I tell you, youíll use this information to improve your life and other people will use it to improve their lives. Then everyone will have a better life and my life will be just like everybody elseís. On one hand, that wouldnít be so bad, but part of me wants to have the better life. Is that wrong? Am I wrong to want to have a better life than people around me? Not that I would be better than them, but just that I could have a life others would want to have. If I share this with you, that wonít happen.

Hey wait, donít go. You canít leave me here without hearing what I have to say. Yes, I get that you have places to go, people to see and all that. Yeah, and I appreciate that you were willing to stop to chat with a stranger. Okay, Iíll tell.

Iím on a mission. A mission to share the love of God and my faith in Jesus Christ with everyone I meet. No, donít go. You waited to hear my secret and now that Iíve shared it with you, you want to leave. Thatís why I keep it a secret. Why I created all the mystery. People always want to hear a secret. The more they think you donít want to tell or that you wonít, the more they want to hear it. As long as I didnít tell you, you were willing to stay here with me, waiting with bated breath. If you leave, youíll miss the best part.

Jesus loves you and so do I. See, my secret is all I promised and more. Maybe not today, but when you accept this secret, your life will change. Then, the world will know my secret.


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Jan Ackerson 04/20/07
The fifth paragraph was my favorite, when you went off on a tangent. Really made me grin. I like your conversational tone here. Nice job.
Brenda Welc04/22/07
This was really neat. I liked the flow and how you hooked me as the reader. P.S. if you don't mind, I'll share your secret.
Catrina Bradley 04/22/07
I like the style of your story, very engaging. I kinda guessed the secret early on - someone already told me. :) I like how you twisted it around at the end and explained WHY you were treating it like a secret. Fabulous writing!