The Official Writing Challenge
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Sometimes, taking a good "laugh" at ourselves helps us through life. If you are actually the narrator here, you did a good job of humor at your dilema. I especially liked the fact that you gained 20 pounds eating what your wife eats. Isn't that the way of it? Good job.
04/19/07
This was rather entertaining as I did find myself laughing out loud at more than a few comments. This world certainly is vain and its idea of perfection is so opposite of the True measure of Perfection.
04/19/07
I feel your pain, pal, I"m right there with ya.
04/20/07
I especially liked the part about fast food since I work at McDonalds! We are who we are and God accepts us for whatever shape we are. It's the spirit that counts! Keep writing and sharing yourself with others!
04/20/07
Good honesty, and it tells a story to the reader. However, the syllables in your sentances are "stumbly", if you understand me. They do not flow as well as they should. I would strongly suggest that you force yourself to write poetry in iambic pentameter once a day, following all the rules of alliteration and meter. It will sharpen your syllabic skills.