The Official Writing Challenge
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Wonderful account of a loving relationship.
04/13/07
Wonderful romance! You portrayed Lori's initial disillusionment and sorrow very well, and the ending was sweet and satisfying!

I did notice you shifted tenses from present to past, and there were a few mechanical errors, but I enjoyed reading your piece.
04/18/07
Great story! I enjoy your writing style!
04/18/07
This is beautiful! Vaguely bittersweet with her remembering, but with a lovely, and romantic marriage proposal to bring it all together. Keep up the good writing!
04/18/07
Great title, wonderful story!
I agree you have a talent for writing. I especially like the way you were able to create the atomosphere around your characters to set the mood of your story.
For word count issues, you can leave the title off your main submission page. I think adding more dialogue would enhance this piece even further. Good job!
04/18/07
Great description. I also caught some grammar issues, but this really engaged me. Lovely!