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This is a good story of wartime. I liked the gentle surprise at the end as to the identity of the soldier. Good job.
04/12/07
Great surprise ending. Keep writing, good job. Janie
A favored passage of scripture, and a tribute to those fighting to us. Thanks for sharing. Angel
04/12/07
Very vivid story! The goosebumps I feel just are not going away!
04/14/07
Great story. Nice twist that the enemy was also a Christian, raises all sorts of questions, doesn't it? Watch for the point of view shift from third person (he) to first person (I me). If you intended the 'I' point of view shift to be the character thinking then italics is a neat way to do that. A hint: Your 7th paragraph is one long sentence. One way to maintain tension in a piece of writing is to keep the sentences short. Having said that, you did maintain the tension needed to keep me rapidly reading until the end. This is great work at this level I look forward to reading more of your stuff. yeggy
An excellent story that provokes the reader to remember and pray for our soldiers. I also like that the enemy was a Christian. Looking forward to reading more of your work.
04/14/07
Wonderful story. You should be proud of this piece.
04/16/07
I think it a good one. Thanks for reminding me that I need to remember to pray always for those fighting on our behalf. It is a reminder that PRAYER IS THE KEY. G
04/17/07
This is a phenominal piece. Very gripping. The use of scripture at the end was superb and really solidified the rest of the article.