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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Music (03/08/07)

TITLE: When The Music Fades
By paula pinto
03/08/07


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I walked down the crwded NYC streets, the vast crowd shoved past me as I walked and their 'push through' reminded me I wasn't alone.
As I lifted my head that moments before hung downward, the smile of a short woman with long red hair greeted me. Though she'll probably never know, the smile I offered back was a mask that hid pain far beyond expression. I reached in my bag for my walkman,
" Could the music that comes from this walkman even save me today?" I said out loud, and the honking horns of drivers trying to swirve out of he way of taxi cabs reassured me no one had heard.
She sang her song, I hardly listened, but whoever she was, she was my friend for a few minutes - a few minutes that I'll remember for the rest of my life. "Isn't what God wants best....," she sang. Tears swelled my eyes, she was telling the truth and I wasn't useto the truth. Years had gone by and I listened to words, words that said, " I love you," "Trust Me," all to many times, none proved true, but her words did...whoever she was. A stranger singing to me on a busy city street..."He loves you more than you love yourself," she continued, a tear fell from my cheek and hit the concreate, another crack in teh cement, they all made sense then - people trying to live their life - make out for themseleves - often to busy for anyone else - to busy to care - to busy to notice- but God saw and she sang her song.


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Jacquelyn Horne03/15/07
Very emotional piece. I sense pain coupled with healing here. Very good! (Watch your "to"s and "too"s however.) You are very good at showing the emotion needed.
Marilyn Klunder03/15/07
I agree; you have a good grasp of painting emotions. Try slowly rereading for spelling errors. I think where you have "tears swelled" maybe use "welled" instead. Good job! Keep writing to His glory!
Loren T. Lowery03/19/07
I saw a lot of emotons racing through this article, showing good writing potential. My comment would be to "flesh out" the characters more by use of dialogue and scene setting.

Debra Avila03/20/07
I relate to the emotions here, I am going through some emotional stuff myself. After 22yrs of marriage he walks out and our divorce was just finalized.He goes on with what he wants to do I have convictions, I am a christain and don't have the liberties he does. Music is healing, I have been taking guitar lessons and singing to the Lord is refreshing to my soul and emotional scares. Thanks for writing your artical, you never know who you will touch.
Janice Cartwright03/21/07
Proof that God can break through the sound barrier that surrounds us, no matter how high the decibel. It is not so much the perfection of our words that make an article effective as it is the anointing He places on it for the intended reader.