The Official Writing Challenge
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03/10/07
The picture of setting and the main character's state of mind came through, but I wanted more of the story. Why was the character so sad and/or angey? Why did she react so toward children? Why the reaction to the man? Keep writing. Thanks!
03/12/07
This shows your talent as a writer but I agree that I was puzzled as to the main character's mood and to how the title connects to the story. I'd love to see this rewritten but with more detail.