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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Shopping (03/01/07)

TITLE: A Husband's Duty
By Donald Paulson
03/04/07


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“Are you all ready to go?”,
My beautiful wife cooed.
Newspaper sale adds galore
Inflated prices for the fooled.

Married in nineteen eighty-six
The year I finished my shopping,
Yet every Christmas I’m asked again
By my wonderful wife a hoping.

Endure crowds, noise, and the cold
To make that one final purchase
For the aunt in a faraway state
We thought had been laid to rest.

How can I refuse my dear,
For it is the season to be jolly.
She’s standing under mistletoe -
To say “no” would be folly.

I hide my emotions and
Put on a smile to get that kiss
I won’t let her know about
The TV special I’ll miss.

Into the dark and on slippery roads
We venture forth to seek a gift
Amid drivers (I can’t use the terms)
Who leave me a little miffed.

Stores with more people than goods
Bumping each other on every aisle.
What do you get a 102 year old
She thinks would be in style?

Frantic looks everywhere
While Christmas music blares.
Jesus, the reason for celebrating;
But does anyone really care?

The Spirit of the holiday
Ruled unconstitional
By men in black robes
Who should be institutional.

Decision made, we wait the line
Other lines seem to be gaining
Who’s the person at the head
Whose purchases keep changing?

Fifty coupons for all buys
Yet still they do ask
For a two cent savings
“Price check on register six.”

Checkout employees working
Without Christmas cheer
Thousands of shoppers
Toting their last minute gear.

Checkers thinking, “Just a
Few more hours to fill,
Please, Dear Lord, help me
This customer not to kill.”

“Tomorrow is Christmas,
Give me Your Joy then.
To spend with my family
And not in the State Pen.”

Tensions mount with each delay
Red faced customers in line
“Please, Dear Lord, give
Us a diversion in time.”

With emotions strained, a cry is heard
A Mother with wailing boy a hanging
Laughter reigns as tension ease.
“Look, Honey, a husband in training!”


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Helen Paynter03/08/07
Great humur in this piece. Well done - I was there! (Not that I'm ever shopping on Christmas Eve you understand, but I know a man who is!)
Helen Paynter03/08/07
Sorry - humour - I do know how to spell really!
Donald Paulson03/08/07
In line with "Shopper? Stop Her!". Perhaps not as skillfully written though.
Men of the world unite!

God bless and keep writing.

Actually we love to be with our wives at anytime.
Marilee Alvey03/10/07
This was a great poem with a wonderful sense of humor infused in it. The only problem I saw were a few stanzas that didn't rhyme. If you could make them rhyme, this piece would be DOUBLE dynamite! Good job! Keep up the humor!
Sara Harricharan 03/13/07
Cute and fun! I like seeing from the husband's POV. The verse with missing the TV special was my fave. Thanks for sharing! ^_^
Donna Emery03/14/07
What a sweet husband to give up your TV special. Don't worry, you can tape it. ;-)
I did enjoy the humor in this, though the rhyming was off in places. Your gift is transmitting humor; keep it up!
Deborah Porter 03/20/07
Clyde, this was a treat to read. Yes, there were some things that could do with a little technical tweak (like "ads," not "adds), but it was fun and that's the most important part. I enjoyed it. Excellent ending as well.

Keep them coming.

With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator and Editor, FaithWriters' Magazine)



   
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