The Official Writing Challenge
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Good memory piece. I think the last line would read better in quotes, but this is good writing.
03/08/07
Great story. The last two paragraphs either need quotes or italics (for thoughts). Otherwise, they sound like a POV shift -- from third person to first person. I love the thought of the red thread running through the tapestry of our lives, and how she started with Moses instead of simply using the Cross. Beautifully done.