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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Sewing (02/22/07)

TITLE: The Wick-ed
By TJ Nickel
02/22/07


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“The Wick-ed”

I can sew you in, cuz I’ve been taught
Just how to pull it off
I can sew you in, so that you don’t know
Just when I pulled it off

At the end, you’ll have felt the beat
And forgotten everything I’ve said
Cuz I’ll say nothing in this really
That you’re supposed to comprehend
Just feel the beat, it’ll do for now
Cuz that’s how you get in

I’ve been trained you see, and you get the joy of this fire
That the trained one can never feel
Best to be you, don’t read too deep
That’s not what’s here, it’s not the real deal
Just a needle and thread and a bit of fine cloth
Stop thinking
...you’re thinking that you are the cloth
Stop thinking, stop thinking,
…here let me help

I can sew you in, cuz I’ve been taught
Just how to pull it off
I can sew you in, so that you don’t know
Just when I pulled it off

Did you see, did you see
How you fell through the flame
And got stuck in the wick with me?
Did you come backwards and down?
How long can you handle it here?
How much do you want to be trained?
Can you sew others in, by singing this tune?
Can you write one just like it in both April and June?
Can you be a wick, and resist being a flame?

Do you not yet know
That that’s the cost?
Stop the rhymes
Then start ‘em again
Say nothing, yet sew
Yourself into it all
Can you, do you, will you?
Are you a wick, or a man?

I’m all over the place
This cloth has no definite shape
But it’ll have one at the end
Will you be in it
See it from without
Or be poking through it like a needle?
Can you get yourself out
Of the stitches I’ve sewn
Through the borders of your flesh
I’ve stitched you in so that you can choose
To be trapped in the candle, rooted and stuck
Or free yourself, free yourself
Oh, you want to be free and fire

I can sew you in, cuz I’ve been taught
Just how to pull it off
I can sew you in, so that you don’t know
Just when I pulled it off

I can sew you in, I can sew you in
You do not want to stay there
I can sew you in, I can sew you in
So, stay there if you dare
I can sew you in, I can sew you in
Rip your flesh to flee
I can sew you in, I can sew you in
If not, then you I’ll be


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Marilee Alvey03/03/07
I don't usually comment on poetry since I am not gifted to write it. However, this is one acid trip! Took me back to the 60's! It had a lot of fresh images and was really deep. I have to say that I liked it, though I don't know about meter or rhyme. It was so sly....or should I say, 'fly?' "Don't think you're the cloth" was cool and also the images about the flame. It was all "Alice in Wonderland," like the song by Jefferson Airplane, "Go Ask Alice." That's just how evil is, too. There was something so haunting here, such an undercurrent that drew me in, that, to my amazement, I really can appreciate your work. Keep writing. You've got an amazing ability to discover fresh images.
Terry R A Eissfeldt 03/07/07
This is so TODAY! Great job. You communicate to this generation. Please keep writing and sharing.
Thanks for the courage to go beyond meter and rhyme and convention. You inspire me to be more brave with my writing.
Julie Arduini03/07/07
This has to be one of the most creative writings I've ever seen. I loved this, deep, challenging, symbolic, this had it all!
Myrna Noyes03/07/07
Very, very interesting and compelling! You have a unique style of writing, and I'd like to read more of your work!
Donna Emery03/08/07
This is very interesting and extremely creative. I had some trouble with understanding some of its meaning but it held my attention. Thanks for sharing it


   
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