The Official Writing Challenge
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02/22/07
Fascinating character study!

There were some switches in tense, and I was also a bit confused as to the relationship between this guy and the narrator. Maybe a bit more setting would clarify this.

You struck a good note with the last sentence or two--driving the lesson home in a subtle manner. Nice.
It seems we can never see ourselves as others see us. This is a classic example.
02/25/07
This was a nice picture of someone who I'd like to have heard more about. Nicely done
02/27/07
Lots of food for thought in here. Good job!