The Official Writing Challenge
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02/22/07
I loved reading this! The beautifully vivid descriptions make everything come alive. My favorite phrases: "pink and white lily thoughts," "tummy sounds like a gas factory," "watermelon stretch marks," "dangling excessories," "little blue square accuser."

I could see and feel everything the narrator was experiencing--and identify with it personally as well. Great message, too. Great job!
02/23/07
I can relate to this as well. I struggle with my own weight and some days I could have been the narrator of this piece. Well written!
02/26/07
This was cute. I liked the end with dumping the little blue square in case of a new one. The message was clear and very well told. Your descriptions were good and I like how you brought in emotions and feelings that other readers could relate to. Very well done! ^_^
02/27/07
Good description. I enjoyed following your thoughts. Good idea to toss out the scale!