The Official Writing Challenge
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02/15/07
I loved this story! I could completely identify with Stephanie, as I too hated arts and crafts in school as well as p.e., was horrible at both, and always got picked last for teams. I could feel her dread!

Wonderfully realistic dialogue--I also enjoyed the mother's quirky "wake-up" song--it's the sort of thing my husband might do to wake up our daughters. Great job!
Good story and well written. It's always good to have a little self pride. This teacher was great in bringing it out.
02/19/07
Good for Stephanie's teacher! How wonderful that this girl is learning her unique worth and yay to the teacher who helped her discover it. Nice job
02/21/07
Nicely done--you have conflict and resolution, the essential elements of a good short story.

E-mail me if you'd like some suggestions on enhancing your dialog.

My heart went out to this little girl--you wrote her well.
Aww...this is very sweet. I had a lot of compassion for the little girl. Well done.
02/21/07
I enjoyed reading this well-written story! I, too, could identify with Stephanie in several areas, and I applaud her wise teacher!
02/21/07
I was wondering what could cause such dread!! The teacher was wonderful, I'm so glad Stephanie learned this lesson young!
02/21/07
I love how you carried the "tick tock" through the story. Very effective. I could definitely feel for Stephanie. A good read!
02/21/07
Boy I remember the days, those art days seemed impossible. You captured her well. Nicely done.