The Official Writing Challenge
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Good message. Short, but to the point.
Your story started well...drew me in. I would like to see this story expanded. Your writing shows potential.
02/21/07
Nice, gentle story! I wish it had been developed a bit more, though, with more description and information. (How old was John, etc., so we could "see" the scene better.) Keep writing! :)