The Official Writing Challenge
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02/16/07
I called my grandmother "Nana" too. She told my mom that "Grandma" sounded too old. ;)

I would have started with the second paragraph, and interwoven the information in the first paragraph into the second. (Clear as mud?) The second paragraph is more apt to draw the reader in.

This is a pretty solid entry overall. Keep writing.