The Official Writing Challenge
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02/10/07
This phrase charmed me: my enchanted hillside was littered with the ghosts of little worms...

Be mindful of missing commas, and of run-on sentences.

A sweet and witty memory, tenderly written.
I really liked this. Especially the line, "I wasn’t a murderer I was not going to sacrifice another brown worm to kill another fish." But watch the use of then and than which is a very common error.