The Official Writing Challenge
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02/09/07
This is very clever--I was surprised at learning what George was up to. I think he probably would have told his wife when she first got suspicious, though...

Be careful of switching POV--sometimes we're in George's head, and sometimes we're in Mariamma's.

Good ending, very sweet.
The ending was informative, but I felt for the wife. Suspician is an ugly thing, but George, like many spouses, did not see the problem until it was too late. However, it ended well.
02/12/07
A delightful story--great dialogue. I could hear and feel with both characters, especially the wife. What a surprise ending! Very clever, as was the title that led to it.

"Mariamma" is an unusual name. Can't help wondering if it belongs to a real person the author knows (??).