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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Gone Fishing (02/01/07)

TITLE: Picking up the pieces
By Syria Munhuweyi
02/06/07


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"I am afraid we can`t continue seeing each other Clair,its over.I never loved you anyway,so why are you lying to my girlfriend that we have been together for 3 years.?Please don`t call me again,i wish you a good life."The line went dead,i felt numb from the head to the toes.For a moment i froze,i kept staring at the pictures on the wall but i wasn`t seeing anything.Tears rolled down my cheeks,i felt this sickening feeling in my belly.In my heart there was this dull pain which i could not explain.After a couple of minutes i gathered my strength,got off the chair and walked into the bedroom.I lay on the bed with my legs covered,my jeans still on.I didn`t care.The whole night i just stared into the ceiling,not thinking,not sleeping,just staring.
"Put out into deep water.!" The strong male voice captured my attention again.I realised my mind had taken me back to last year again.For the first time i realised that tears were pouring down my cheeks.I looked up at the pastor,he looked so confident,so enthusiastic.I wiped away the tears and started paying attention to what he was saying."They had gone fishing but despite working hard all night they caught nothing,"he continued."Some of you have given up already,you are washing the nets but the Lord is telling you to put out into deep water"Go deeper into the things of God,go deeper into the word and you will catch a great number of fish."I chose to believe him at this moment.I believed God was speaking to me.Having the love of your life taken away by another woman is painful but i made up my mind i was going to let God help me pick up the pieces.Iknew it wasn`t going to be easy but i decided i would go for it with all my strength.I believed i could always try again with God on my side.Maybe oneday i would get into the right relatinship,one that is ordained by God....

Ref: (see Luke5:2,4,6) CSV.


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Jan Ackerson 02/08/07
I really appreciated the hope and repentant spirit that your narrator showed upon hearing the Word.

Your writing shows tremendous promise, and will improve vastly with a few easy fixes--attention to capitalization, and to conventions of punctuation and spacing. You can write--there's no doubt about that--but people will be distracted by the format.

Keep writing--I look forward to reading more in the future.
Marylea Monroe02/08/07
Nice, I like the hope and the determination the narrator displays in the end. You have the basic knack to put together a story; this will improve with time and practice. There is a need for greater attention to, spelling (I'm terrible at this) capitalization and punctuation. Keep writing I'm looking forward to reading more of your work.
Jacquelyn Horne02/09/07
Good story content. Proofreading is a MUST for any writing. In proofreading you will find most of your own errors.